SkyHawk: The Cam Story (novel about a 240SX)

[lamonsterscorner]

I figgured since a few of you asked about the novel I'd just make a post about it.

The story is about a 16 year old that gets his license and inherits his Dads old 1992 Nissan 240SX. The cars got a little work done to it like some engine and suspension upgrades and a sick Diff. (for drifting of course). So anyways, the the boys friend takes him to this racing spot called The Strip. Drag racing and Mountain racing occurs there. So the kid has this uncanny sense of driving and drifting. He's got skills on the mountain. Of course he meets a girl and of course this girl has a 1997 240SX thats bright yellow and of course she Drifts. She tells the boy the story of the mountain how the first racer from the city started it. well as the the story goes on he finds out that the original Drift king of the mountain was his father. So as the story progresses he has to make a decision as to whether or not he wants to race the mountain. He gets some encouragement when he meets the jerk thats the current Drift King. So now he wants to race and assembles a crew. But beating the current Drift King may be more than he can handle.

BTW the name SkyHawk originates from the boy's fathers name. And so instead of Drift King they use SkyHawk as the title for the number one racer on the Strip.

The book is nearly complete. the characters are awesome. the plot is pretty good and the cars are awesome.

Edit::: i forgot to mention that the main character hears voices. its becomes its own entity and was quite fun to work with. imagine a voice in your head that criticizes you. lol. he works the characters brain like a computer and brings up memories and stuff. its quite interesting. makes it ust a tad more....fictional i assume. and totally fun

buuuuuuuuut now that i know you cant put a SR20DE RR in a 240 the whole ending of the story has to be reworked. ( i didn not know that there was a difference in engines as far as FWD versus RWD. ~slaps forehead~ Im still learning this stuff. :p ) thank god though its only the last two parts of the book. only 15 something then chapters to edit. bleh.

anymore questions please feel free to ask here.

Ive got a Writing page on my facebook. just PM if you'd like the name

[Eikon]

Let me get this straight.. You wrote a novel, but you can't spell the second word in your post?
And you are paraphrasing Initial D and F&F Tokyo Drift. Sounds really interesting.

[simmode1]

This sounds epic. PM sent.

[Cody240]

Let me get this straight.. You wrote a novel, but you can't spell the second word in your post?
And you are paraphrasing Initial D and F&F Tokyo Drift. Sounds really interesting.

lol dude I hope you know how much its sounds like you combined those two, it's unreal. either way I hope you have success with it, we all have to do what we want to do in life whether people like it or not. Good luck but make sure to read into what your writing about to make sure you get it right.

[lamonsterscorner]

Let me get this straight.. You wrote a novel, but you can't spell the second word in your post?
And you are paraphrasing Initial D and F&F Tokyo Drift. Sounds really interesting.

uh first off when i casually write i dont use proper grammar. s

second off my book is totally different from those movies/ animes

third of all its a book dude so..um..yeah its different from a movie. its A BOOK.

fourth of all FF TD was lame when it came to drifting. Initial D is a manga/anime thats Japanese and the plotline is totally different from my book

Fifth of all my book takes place in the USA not Japan

Sixth of the book is always different from the movie. ALWAYS.



so uh shall i go on?

Everyones a critic apparently. I have never "paraphrased" anything. unlike the those movies you refer to, the book is centered around the Nissan S chassis. the book is just as much about the 240SX as it is about the main character. i took my favorite car and made a story about it

[OutToWinPAHC]

Stick to internet sex stories, more people will read it.

[fiznowler]

Stick to internet sex stories, more people will read it.

guilty as charged

[Hoffman5982]

Let me get this straight.. You wrote a novel, but you can't spell the second word in your post?
And you are paraphrasing Initial D and F&F Tokyo Drift. Sounds really interesting.

uh first off when i casually write i dont use proper grammar. s

second off my book is totally different from those movies/ animes

third of all its a book dude so..um..yeah its different from a movie. its A BOOK.

fourth of all FF TD was lame when it came to drifting. Initial D is a manga/anime thats Japanese and the plotline is totally different from my book

Fifth of all my book takes place in the USA not Japan

Sixth of the book is always different from the movie. ALWAYS.



so uh shall i go on?

Everyones a critic apparently. I have never "paraphrased" anything. unlike the those movies you refer to, the book is centered around the Nissan S chassis. the book is just as much about the 240SX as it is about the main character. i took my favorite car and made a story about it

LOL, this makes no sense at all.

3 and 6 are the same thing btw. Hope you didnt do that in your book

[matt_240sx]

This sounds almost as lame as Fast and Furious Tokyo Drift.

[Metal Angel]

This sounds like it could have some serious potential... unfortunately, you lost me when you forgot how to write on a forum. I am an artist, so I can understand the need to draft a few sloppy sketches as a break from a more involved piece, but this is different. It hurts me to read your posts on here. How can you convince me that your serious writing is any different? I believe that you do actually have proper grammar and spelling in your book- thanks spellcheck- but that does not make the piece readable.

I realize that it is unfair for me to criticize your book before I have even read the first word of the prologue, so consider this a critique on how you present yourself. If you would have taken a little more care presenting the idea to us, I'm sure everyone on this forum would be reading your book. We are all s-chassis owners- it doesn't take much to get us to read something involving the most beloved object in our lives.

[simmode1]

This sounds like it could have some serious potential... for unintentional hilarity.

FTFY.

[charat]

so you're basically making a f*** up initial D with a schizophrenic main character...

[Eikon]

Look, I'm all for creativity, and I think its great that you wrote a book. I hope it's excellent and you get it published and go on to great success. But, your synopsis shows very little creativity. You have to understand the genre of "tuner car life" is dominated by two stories; Fast and Furious and Initial D. It makes no difference whether they are in book form or movie form. The synopsis you gave us is almost an exact combination of those two stories. Let me demonstrate based my knowledge, (which I admit is not exactly expert):

The story is about a 16 year old that gets his license and inherits his Dads old 1992 Nissan 240SX. The cars got a little work done to it like some engine and suspension upgrades and a sick Diff. (for drifting of course).

= Takume from Initial D is a young kid who gets to use his dads old AE86. The car has a little work done to it including engine and suspension upgrades that make it well set up for drifting.

So anyways, the the boys friend takes him to this racing spot called The Strip. Drag racing and Mountain racing occurs there.

= Takume's friend takes him to the mountain drifting roads where mountain racing occurs.
= the dude in FF3 has a friend (the african american kid) who takes him to the parking garages where they race up the garage ramps.

So the kid has this uncanny sense of driving and drifting. He's got skills on the mountain.

= Takume has an uncanny sense of driving and drifting.. He's got skills on the mountain.

Of course he meets a girl and of course this girl has a 1997 240SX thats bright yellow and of course she Drifts. She tells the boy the story of the mountain how the first racer from the city started it. well as the the story goes on he finds out that the original Drift king of the mountain was his father.

= FF3 guy meets the hot asian mix girl who has a nice car that she drifts. She teaches him some of the history of mountain racing.
= Takume finds out that his father was originally the legendary mountain racer from the past.

So as the story progresses he has to make a decision as to whether or not he wants to race the mountain.

= Takume has to decide if he wants to race on the mountain.

He gets some encouragement when he meets the jerk thats the current Drift King.

= the drift king in FF3 is a jerk
= a few of the prominent drifters in Initial D are jerks as well.

So now he wants to race and assembles a crew.

= FF1, FF2, FF3, Initial D

But beating the current Drift King may be more than he can handle.

= FF3 and Initial D as well.


There are just WAY too many similarities in every single aspect of the story that you shared with us.
Be creative and come up with an original story!

[bersh240]

Can i have a book on tape?

[Metal Angel]

This sounds like it could have some serious potential... for unintentional hilarity.

FTFY.

Oh yeah, my bad. Thanks!

[Cody240]

[/quote]
= Takume from Initial D is a young kid who gets to use his dads old AE87. The car has a little work done to it including engine and suspension upgrades that make it well set up for drifting. [/quote]
Um Takumi's car was an AE86 there is no 87 lol I think you miss typed that, but any way. OP dont take what most of the guys on here say to heart do what you want. If you can get this book out there more power to you.

[Metal Angel]

Of course he meets a girl and of course this girl has a 1997 240SX thats bright yellow and of course she Drifts.

Why would you ever write a story that you can say "of course" about? Write something less predictable. Have him fall in love with a ballet dancer girl who has no appreciation for cars... or better yet, have him fall for a gay fireman. Seriously, you don't get any respect for a story that has already been written.

[krash]

And you are paraphrasing Initial D and F&F Tokyo Drift. Sounds really interesting.

AND Dexter! :

Edit::: i forgot to mention that the main character hears voices. its becomes its own entity and was quite fun to work with. imagine a voice in your head that criticizes you. lol. he works the characters brain like a computer and brings up memories and stuff. its quite interesting. makes it ust a tad more....fictional i assume. and totally fun

Still interested to see what becomes of this.

[Eikon]

Um Takumi's car was an AE86 there is no 87 lol I think you miss typed that,

yep.. typo. My bad! Thanks for catching that!

[DamonDread]

Sorry OP but you had to know this was gonna happen. I mean its the net. No one has anything nice to say. Internet Gangstas!
I write alot, and im working on a fantasy novel. There is no story i could tell that has not somehow been told already considering the amount of fantasy authors. However, that is not going to stop me from writing it. Go to Helium.com and join up man. Submit your story there and get the opinions of real published writers. When you buy a 240 and it breaks down (cuz it will) THEN post here. But your probably still gonna get your feelings hurt. LMAO.

[simmode1]

Sorry OP but you had to know this was gonna happen. I mean its the net. No one has anything nice to say. Internet Gangstas!
I write alot, and im working on a fantasy novel. There is no story i could tell that has not somehow been told already considering the amount of fantasy authors. .

I sense the One True source... WOT reader?

[DamonDread]

Sorry OP but you had to know this was gonna happen. I mean its the net. No one has anything nice to say. Internet Gangstas!
I write alot, and im working on a fantasy novel. There is no story i could tell that has not somehow been told already considering the amount of fantasy authors. .

I sense the One True source... WOT reader?

You scare me sometimes Sim. You never post anything that doesnt, amaze, intrigue, or scare me LMAO.
Yes I am a HUGE Robert Jordan fan, but i have started to migrate over to Fiest too. He is pretty good.

[simmode1]

^^^I've seen your screen-name forever, but never put 2 and 2 together until now!

OP, before I got into Journalism, i fancied myself being a sci-fi/Fantasy writer too. But like DamonDread said, its soooo hard to break new ground! I found most of my ideas to be inspired by (ripped off...lol) cartoons/comics/other books/ etc that I'd seen before.

It was a pretty disheartening experience. What I learned, though, from my favorite authors (Robert Jordan, Terry Brooks and of course Tolkien) is that it takes EMMENSE amounts of research and attention to detail to write a good story. It even takes tons of life experience to be able to effectively verbalize the complexities of interpersonal relationships between your characters or describe things that readers have never seen (or might not even exist in real life).

I don't mean to discourage you from your work. Instead, I wish you well and encourage you to spend even more time honing your craft...

DamonDread, Wheel Of Time is sooo awesome. I stalled out on Book 9 though. Most original fantasy story I've ever read. I love it so much because it reads like a manga to me. I'd love to see it illustrated in manga style...

[badbob2121]

ummmm.....yea...

[gigabit240]

The story is about a 16 year old that gets his license and inherits his Dads old 1992 Nissan 240SX.

Haha thats intresting because when i turned 16 last year my dad gave his ol 92 hatch from his bachelor days to me for my B day.

Still need money for mods though...

[barefoot mat]

Stick to internet sex stories, more people will read it.

win

[PyR0NiAk]

So many posts that I could quote, so I'm just going to say

[lamonsterscorner]

Subject matter is all that is the same. merely coincidental. I've never plagiarized or copied anything. There are tons of novels that are the same in genre, subject matter, even in some instances, plot matter. but its how the story is told that counts.

None of the material in the book is the same from any of the movies, anime, what ever you wanna compare it to. there are similarities in some instances. but the whole entire story is different. There are few written stories on racing in fiction.

There are referances like qoutes from initial d the movie.

but although the subject may not be original. the story is.

I personally say dont knock it till you try it. :p

[lamonsterscorner]

uh first off when i casually write i dont use proper grammar. s

second off my book is totally different from those movies/ animes

third of all its a book dude so..um..yeah its different from a movie. its A BOOK.

fourth of all FF TD was lame when it came to drifting. Initial D is a manga/anime thats Japanese and the plotline is totally different from my book

Fifth of all my book takes place in the USA not Japan

Sixth of the book is always different from the movie. ALWAYS.



so uh shall i go on?

Everyones a critic apparently. I have never "paraphrased" anything. unlike the those movies you refer to, the book is centered around the Nissan S chassis. the book is just as much about the 240SX as it is about the main character. i took my favorite car and made a story about it

LOL, this makes no sense at all.

3 and 6 are the same thing btw. Hope you didnt do that in your book[/quote]

Late nights. Bleh.

sorry if i seem repetitive.

[lamonsterscorner]

[quote="Eikon"]Look, I'm all for creativity, and I think its great that you wrote a book. I hope it's excellent and you get it published and go on to great success. But, your synopsis shows very little creativity. You have to understand the genre of "tuner car life" is dominated by two stories; Fast and Furious and Initial D. It makes no difference whether they are in book form or movie form. The synopsis you gave us is almost an exact combination of those two stories. Let me demonstrate based my knowledge,[quote]

I based the book on the 240SX. 240SX! If you give me a movie with the 240 as the basis of the a novel or a movie then please let me know........WAIT!

Dont you dare mention that movie Redline. Lmao. okay so that movie is about a 240SX. 1998 if im not mistakened. its like from another country so i think they refer to it as the 200SX. Australia i think was the country. lame plot but still pretty good.

BTW:


And Initial D is not the oooooooonly Drfit Racing Anime.

Neither is Fast the and the Furious the only Race Movie

idk I wrote a book about a 240 put some characters in it. and let it fly. I only wanted to share a passion of mine. im writing novels in other in subject matters. Adoption. Sci fi, Fantasy. but the Skyhawk book is my baby.

Thanks for the Criticism Mister Eikon.

and thanks everyone for your input.

I dont write to become a famous writer. or because i want tons of money or something like that. i just wanna share a story. if i make no money out of it im cool with it.
My hope is that this book really shows The 240 in all its glroy. its been my favorite car since i was a kid. Ive finally own one now (needs a new engine tho. Bleh. soon ill here it purr)

Love this forums btw. i used to visit it back when i had my 98 sentra. boy was that car fun to tune up and street race.

Now ive got this 240 and now im back.

yaay